Dark Cold Night

A Poem By Abbie // 4/29/2009

The sun has withdrawn its last warm rays,
leaving the earth to cool itself in the dark.
The ground relinquishes the warmth of the burning days,
as the air chills in the indigo dark.

A breath of wind ruffles my hair in passing,
pressing into my skin soft fingers of cold.
Greedily it snatches the warmth of my breathing,
giving in return a lungful of cold.

The silence seems to numb my cold ears,
no one else has ventured into the night.
I haven’t felt this alive in years,
Breathing and walking in the dark cold night.

My footsteps fall silent as I gaze at the sky,
glittering above my head are silvery stars.
Shining, remote, untouchable, high,
offering no warmth, are the faraway stars.

I breathe in the wonder, as well as cold night air,
savoring the joy of being quiet and alone.
No people to yell, jostle, interrupt or stare,
just me and the wind: content, alone.

Then the soft wind-fingers turn hard, I shake with cold,
sharp claws of chill air slicing through my clothes.
I feel small in the dark, chilled and certainly less bold,
I rub my arms through my cold clothes.

I turn and look towards the shadow of my home,
familiar comforts fighting the allure of stars.
My feet move before I think, carrying me in a backwards roam,
sorry I cannot answer the call of the stars.

Gold light pours through windows, and laughter, and noise,
I glance back over my shoulder at the stars I love best.
At the doorstep I stop, frozen and poised,
wavering, wondering which I love best.

I glance back at the empty, silent void of night,
remembering the soundless, lonely joy.
I look back at the windows, full of comforting light,
Remembering the laughter, the people, the joy.

I take one last breath of lonely air, opening the door to family and noise.
Sometimes light and warmth are best.
But I won’t forget the night, and its quiet, lonely joys.

Sometimes, just sometimes,
light and warmth are best.

Comments

This is so good! "...Now

This is so good!

"...Now you've heard of the French Nation, and the British Nation....Well this, is the Imagin Nation." Kris Kringle (Miracle on 34th Street)

The Brit | Sat, 05/02/2009

Thanks!

Thank you!

"Though this be madness, yet there is method in't." ~Pelonius in "Hamlet"

Abbie | Sat, 05/02/2009

"Though this be madness, yet there is method in't." ~Pelonius in "Hamlet"

This almost made me cry.

This almost made me cry. I've felt like this so often, torn between sky and earth. In fact, I wrote a poem very similar to this, which I'll have to post on here sometime...

"I turn and look towards the shadow of my home,
familiar comforts fighting the allure of stars.
My feet move before I think, carrying me in a backwards roam,
sorry I cannot answer the call of the stars."
This is the stanza that made me feel sad, because I know exactly what you're talking about. :( But it's a good sadness, I suppose, and this is a very good poem. Just be careful not to repeat words too much. ;)

Sarah B. | Sun, 05/03/2009

Thanks!

I'm glad you liked it--you're right, it was a sad poem. But since I know the "family and noise" that's waiting for me inside the house, it isn't quite as sad for me. Just a little.

thank you for your feedback--knowing I've made something readers relate to and understand is what makes me want to keep writing.

I'd love to see your poem. I'll be watching for it.

"Though this be madness, yet there is method in't." ~Pelonius in "Hamlet"

Abbie | Sun, 05/03/2009

"Though this be madness, yet there is method in't." ~Pelonius in "Hamlet"

Wow.

This is just my kind of poem.  There is so much imagery in it.  Not just random flowery imagery, but real scenes that made me (vividly) recall the winter night walks I used to take.  I think that my favorite lines are in the third stanza, but I love the whole poem. 

 

Raen | Fri, 07/31/2009

"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind."
— Dr. Seuss

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