The Sail of the Moon has Opened

A Poem By Bernadette // 5/29/2011

~For the Theme of Spring, a Mysterious Jar


You’re spinning by 

Too fast for me to hold you 

My arms are reaching, my hands are grasping

You’re passing me by my fingertips


You are glowing,

Glowing like the moon is within your skin


You laugh and pass me by

Like mist in the hills

There mist lays white-brushed clouds  

Yet it’s unreachable


Your wings are silver

Glimmering like a fish’s tail 


The wind is carrying you swiftly by

You said you would wait for me

Wait for me on the moon


You are dancing

Too nimble for me to follow you

Perhaps this is all a dream 

‘Till morning sunders


Your dress is like mail

Shimmering like silk

Shining like pearl


You say the moon is calling

The boat has opened its sails


Yet wait as a shadow falls

Crossing the starlit path

Where no wind blew, to move the branches

To pass a shadow on moon’s face


You dance like a flame


Then lid and glass

Sweep over you

You are wrapped up like a star in dawn

Which wracks the sky in mystery

Asunder it blows

Like a horn in the mist

Like a firefly in a pit





  This poem was amazing. It was so beautiful that I had to read it aloud. It felt magical to me, and certainly mysterious. The ending felt sad to me, but in a way that was what made it a great poem.

Kathleen | Mon, 05/30/2011

I echo what Aredhel said.

Enchantingly beautiful, intriguingly mysterious. It leaves you feeling like you've just awakened from a beautiful dream that you can't quite remember...

Mary | Tue, 05/31/2011

Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!

I love this.

It's beautiful and dizzying and captivating all at the same time.

Kyleigh | Tue, 05/31/2011

There really should be more

There really should be more writing like this out there in the published world.

E | Tue, 05/31/2011

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Lovely! The rhyme pattern was

Lovely! The rhyme pattern was inspiring and beautiful : )

Clare | Tue, 05/31/2011


OK, well, I started writing out this comment with some of my favorite lines from this poem... But there were so many I was practically copying in the whole thing! It is all very poetic. Love this, love the dream-like quality. It made me think somewhat of fairies, but I also really like the underlying tone of something slipping by...
You're really maturing as a poet and a writer. That is awesome to see.

Hannah W. | Tue, 05/31/2011

Please take me away... :)

Please take me away...


Anna | Fri, 06/03/2011

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief


 Absolutely beautiful! I loved it! 

Ari (not verified) | Tue, 06/07/2011


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