Shooting Stars

A Poem By Bridget // 1/8/2011

A hundred shooting stars
A wish for every one
A hundred silent dreams
That I should never want.

A thousand shooting stars
A quiet hope for each
Reminding me of all the things
I don’t know how to reach.
 
A million shooting stars
Lighting up the sky
Flashing in the dark
As I begin to cry.
 
A single shooting star
Lasting longer than the rest
The moon is going down
In the darkness of the west
 
No more shooting stars
But the sky is getting light
And my way begins to show
At the turning of the night
 
The things I thought were gone
I finally start to see
And at last I hear you say
That you love me.

Comments

Oh, I love this!!!

I love this poem. The rhyming is perfect and it flows beautifully...I especially loved:

 A million shooting stars

Lighting up the sky

Flashing in the dark

As I begin to cry.

Good job!! :)

Madeline | Sat, 01/08/2011

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Thank you!  The last line -

Thank you!  The last line - the rhythm isn't as good, but it was the only thing that belonged there.  Anyway, glad you loved it!  :-D  I find myself abnormally gleeful right now.

Bridget | Mon, 01/10/2011

"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya

:)

Shooting stars, the type of poem I always think 'I'll write tha someday' and never do.

Great job Bridget, I love it!

Kay J Fields | Sat, 01/15/2011

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THIS WAS AWESOME!

I....LOVED....THIS!!!!!!!

I love every single line! But I have to say the last two lines was my favorite!

No more shooting stars
But the sky is getting light
And my way begins to show
At the turning of the night
 
The things I thought were gone
I finally start to see
And at last I hear you say
That you love me.

LOVE IT! It went straight to my heart! The rythme was really good, and I loved how you worded things! LOved it all the way! Through and Through!

<3!

Write on!

 

Kassady | Sun, 01/16/2011

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

Thanks, you guys!  *huge

Thanks, you guys!  *huge happy grin*

Bridget | Tue, 01/18/2011

"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya

Gorgeous :) lovelovelove it!

Gorgeous :) lovelovelove it!

Erin | Wed, 01/19/2011

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

All smiles...

Thank you, Erin!

Bridget | Thu, 01/20/2011

"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya

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