Eleta: Prologue

Fiction By Clare Marie // 8/17/2009

**Hey everyone!  I feel kinda weird posting some fantasy after so many wonderful, dramatic, deep pieces that have been posted on apricotpie lately, but I'd really like to know what you guys think of this...it doesn't really make sense right now, but I think it will after I post the first chapter.  Btw, the book is NOT about the animal called a seahawk.  Or a tree. :D  These are just symbols.  :)  Enjoy.**




                       "Is it by your discernment that the hawk soars?" -(Job 40: 26)




One seahawk.


It is flying through the mists, high above the earth.  Proud.

Why does it not notice the rising storm?  The winds batter it about.  The rains drench its feathers.  Thunder and lightning boom, flash.

Poor bird!  It is tired and seeks refuge.  Who will help it?  Ah, poor bird, you are alone....

But wait!  What is this?  Look, O bird, where the winds have blown you...

A tree.


It stands on a lone island, reaching with warmth for the bird.  It is strong.  Strong and protective.

The seahawk flies eagerly into its arms.

And though the winds still blow, the rains still pour, the thunder and lightning still shatters the air, the bird is unafraid.

It nestles close under the sheltering tree.




Hmmm, interesting! I wish it

Hmmm, interesting! I wish it was longer!

BTW, when are you going to post more of 'And Then There Were Three'?

Laura Elizabeth | Mon, 08/17/2009

The best stories are those that are focused, unassuming, and self-confident enough to trust the reader to figure things out. --


I like it, it's an

I like it, it's a well-chosen metaphor. I'll be eagerly looking forward to the first chapter.

And fantasy can be "wonderful, dramatic, and deep" too!

Annabel | Mon, 08/17/2009


I liked it! Interesting! :)





Anonymous | Mon, 08/17/2009

Ooo! Post more!

Ooo! Post more!

E | Tue, 08/18/2009

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

The descriptions were good!

The descriptions were good! Very nice. You made me wonder what the symbolisms are for! Can't wait for the next!

Heather | Wed, 08/19/2009

And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
Michelle Tumes, "There Goes My Love"

Thanks everyone. :) Laura:

Thanks everyone. :)

Laura: ATWT should be posted sometime this week or the next. :)

Clare Marie | Thu, 08/20/2009

"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

It seems more like a poem

It seems more like a poem than a story.  Is the whole story going to be written in that way, or is it just the prologue?

(I like it ,BTW.)


"Life's disappointments are harder to take when you don't know any swear words." - Calvin and Hobbes

Bridget | Thu, 08/20/2009

"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya

great job!

  It seems very mysterious. GREAT job! :)

Jackie West | Tue, 03/02/2010


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