Lament from a Lonely Heart

A Poem By Clare Marie // 2/27/2009

Against fire black and whips of flame
You stood your ground, stooped with pain
You leaned on your staff, wizened but strong
You struck his sword, mocked his thong
At last you cast him down from on high,
Morgoth's soldier; then tell me why
You lingered at that fateful moment,
Falling in a fiery torrent?
How could you, so great, the victor
Be dragged cruelly down, Mithrandir?
Friend, my friend, I am lost without you
I cannot see what I should do
You were ever there, guiding me
How can I guide, I foresee?
Men my name honor, elves call me wise
Do they not see beneath my guise?
And yet I know well what you would say
A hobbit composed a poem one day
I must repeat once more those verses,
Accept my road and many curses
One day my dreams will be all fulfilled
Will I be saddened, or will I be thrilled?
My destiny I never wanted,
To be hidden, scorned, and ever hunted.
I never wanted the crown or throne
And yet I want not to be alone
There is bitter and sweet in my destiny-cup
One can look down or one can look up
Without you at my side, my dearest friend
Can I still see the very end?
O Pilgrim grey, come back to me
Help me my hidden path to see
I will bear this weight, this lasting pain
In the hope you will come home again.

Is that not my name?

Silence...

My road is hedged with swords.

Loneliness...

I will journey on.

Comments

Beautiful

I can see the events as he recalls them...
Beautiful. Very well done.

James | Fri, 02/27/2009

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"The idea that we should approach science without a philosophy is itself a philosophy... and a bad one, because it is self-refuting." -- Dr. Jason Lisle

Very Good

Very Good! I like it!

Laura Elizabeth | Fri, 02/27/2009

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The best stories are those that are focused, unassuming, and self-confident enough to trust the reader to figure things out. --

http://lauraeandrews.blogspot.com/2014/05/dont-tell-me-hes-smart.html

You captured Aragorn's

You captured Aragorn's sorrow at losing Gandalf's wisdom very well here, Claire. Good job! I really like these verses, especially "My road is hedged with swords...Loneliness...I will journey on." Well done, and congrats for being here a year!
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And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
Michelle Tumes, "There Goes My Love"

Heather | Fri, 02/27/2009

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And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
Michelle Tumes, "There Goes My Love"

I. Am. Officially. In love

I.
Am.
Officially.
In love with.
Your writing.
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In this sinful world there is no such thing as "peace" unless someone strong enough is willing to protect and defend it. -Norm Bomer, God's World News

Anna | Fri, 02/27/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Thank you so much, all of

Thank you so much, all of you. :)
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"Elves and Dragons! Cabbages and potatoes are better for me and you. Don't go getting mixed up in the business of your betters, or you'll land in trouble too big for you." — Hamfast Gamgee (the Gaffer)

Clare Marie | Sun, 03/01/2009

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

And it's appropriate, too,

And it's appropriate, too, since it's Aragorn's birthday today.
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In this sinful world there is no such thing as "peace" unless someone strong enough is willing to protect and defend it. -Norm Bomer, God's World News

Anna | Sun, 03/01/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

And it's the anniversary of

And it's the anniversary of his death.

But I prefer the birthday. :D
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"Elves and Dragons! Cabbages and potatoes are better for me and you. Don't go getting mixed up in the business of your betters, or you'll land in trouble too big for you." — Hamfast Gamgee (the Gaffer)

Clare Marie | Sun, 03/01/2009

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

I prefer not to think about

I prefer not to think about that, actually... I was purposely NOT mentioning it...
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In this sinful world there is no such thing as "peace" unless someone strong enough is willing to protect and defend it. -Norm Bomer, God's World News

Anna | Mon, 03/02/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

I know what you mean.

I know what you mean. *cries*
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"Elves and Dragons! Cabbages and potatoes are better for me and you. Don't go getting mixed up in the business of your betters, or you'll land in trouble too big for you." — Hamfast Gamgee (the Gaffer)

Clare Marie | Wed, 03/04/2009

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

"Estel, Estel!" That broke

"Estel, Estel!"
That broke my heart. :(
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In this sinful world there is no such thing as "peace" unless someone strong enough is willing to protect and defend it. -Norm Bomer, God's World News

Anna | Wed, 03/04/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Sniff

So sad...I love it in that sad sort of way.
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The Word is alive/and it cuts like a sword through the darkness
With a message of life to the hopeless/and afraid...

~"The Word is Alive' by Casting Crowns

May my words be a light that guides others to the True Light and Word.

Julie | Thu, 03/26/2009

Formerly Kestrel

LOVE the ending, how it goes

LOVE the ending, how it goes from rapid words to a sudden slow trickle:

"Is that not my name?

Silence...

My road is hedged with swords.

Loneliness..."

VERY effective; the quiet of it jumped out at me and touched me.

Sarah Bethany | Fri, 03/27/2009

Great!

I love this poem! Especially the last bit. The line "One can look down or one can look up" really struck me. It's quite true, isn't it? :)

I have a... erm... well, a bit of an embarassing question about this... er... what did you mean by "thong" up at the top? I mean, did you really mean a... *ahem* Anyway, when I read that, I thought it was going to be a funny poem. I'm just not quite sure that what I was thinking of was what you meant! ;)

Sarah B. | Fri, 03/27/2009

Thanks, guys. :) Sarah B:

Thanks, guys. :)

Sarah B: No, I don't think what you're thinking of is what I was! :P In fact, when I showed it to my mom, she asked about that too. She was like "Thong?" Actually, I meant the thong of a whip. :)
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"Sing as if no one is listening;
Dance like no one is watching;
Live as if you will die tomorrow;
Love like it will never hurt."
-Old Irish Saying

Clare Marie | Fri, 03/27/2009

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

I did not even notice

I did not even notice that... I guess I'm just really used to archaic language...
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Chaos.
Panic.
Disorder.
My work here is done.

Anna | Fri, 03/27/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Ik, I'm a year late. But let

Ik, I'm a year late. But let me just say what Anna said.

I am in love with your writing! :D

Maethorwen (not verified) | Mon, 01/25/2010

Thanks! :D

Thanks! :D

Clare Marie | Thu, 01/28/2010

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

Wow!

I just watched FotR through Gandalf's death last night...this is so appropriate. I could totally identify with Aragorn's sorrow and despair.

Julie | Fri, 01/29/2010

Formerly Kestrel