I See Him - song

A Poem By Madeline // 2/10/2015

**Please see notes before reading**

I See Him
by Me

Verse 1

He’s funny
That’s the first reason
He’s witty
I’d love to tease him
To have
His eyes
On me

I’m selfish
Don’t need a reason
I’m lying
I don’t believe it
Even for
For a moment
That it’d be



What would I say
Would it be amusing
Probably not
I know it’s confusing
The way this has ensued
Whatever he says it’ll make me nervous
To stand on my own is a great disservice
To everyone who sees me
Like I see him x3

Verse 2

He’s back
In the corners of my head
I’m afraid
Of what will happen
When he
To leave

I’m brave
I can say that much
Yet I’d give in
Though it’s just a hunch
That without him
I’d see
More clearly




I came to petition
Against the admittance
Of your indifference
To me

Please don’t resist it
You see I insist it
If I want this so badly it’ll happen
Don’t you think?
Or is that just too



And I see him
But I see him
But I see him


Very well-done! It flows

Very well-done! It flows nicely. There was one part that was confusing to me, but it may just be a typo.
"I’m brave
I can say that much
Yet I’ve give in
Though it’s just a hunch
That without him
I’d see
More clearly

I didn't watch the YouTube 'cause I don't have enough data left, but I will watch it as soon as my next plan kicks in.

Damaris Ann | Wed, 02/11/2015

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

Wow, Homey! New favorite! I

Wow, Homey! New favorite! I listened to it on YouTube and it was so lovely and I love the arrangement of it. I do have to say it was hard to hear the words clearly, but that might be the distance of where you stood and the camera and such. I did not think you were schreachy at ALL, omg, your voice was fabulous!

I think this is enjoyable, lovely, and flows beautifully! The wording was easy to follow and like I said, flowed. It would definitely be in the top ten iTunes indie genre, I would say! I wonder if you could add guitar notes at all? It would be interesting to see what all you could do with it, but I like it as it is as well! Very, very well done!

Kassady | Wed, 02/11/2015

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
Write On!

*steals Homey's rights*

Just kidding.... I agree with the need for protection out there.
First of all, I LOVE how you sing with your body!
I wish I hadn't read your note before listening to it, because then I kept looking for the 'screeching' without meaning to, and I didn't hear it at all. This song was gorgeous.
I still think you deserve to be on the radio, right next to the likes of Dido. I think that's where you'll be if you ever wanted to!

Sarah Bethany | Thu, 02/12/2015

Goodness Homey!

How on earth did I miss this treasure! I must've been hiding under a rock too long or something! This was fabulous! I listened to the video and I absolutely loved the song! You did a wonderful job :) And for the record (like that little pun there?), your voice is very beautiful! I think we always critique our voices more harshly than we should! Lovey, lovely, lovely!

Wings of Eternity | Tue, 04/28/2015

"Be an example to all believers in what you say, in the way you live, in your love, your faith, and your purity." 1 Timothy 4:12


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