A Poem By Madeline // 4/8/2011

**The idea for this came to me a few days ago, so I sat down and wrote it! Hope you enjoy! 


Kneeling down beside her bed

She bends her head in prayer

Black hair straight as silk

Quivers from His stare


"Father, please lead me,

In the coming months.

This place is new and foriegn.

But in you my heart trusts."


Skin as dark as night

Hands pressed firm together

She shines her face heavenbound

And makes a wish forever


"God, please understand.

I really need your guidance.

You know what is best for me.

Help me not to fight it."


Another girl across the sea

Her blonde hair bright and fine

She crawls under the covers

Wanting just to hide


"Jesus if you please,

Pass this along to my dear.

I miss her playful bark.

Help me to not tear."


She needs His help as equally

As all the other girls

So she closes her eyes and prays

Along with all the world


"Man up in the sky,

You must need our love to.

Give us your hope daily.

Show us what to do."


Then the four voices continue

With messages to send

They open their eyes hopefully

"We love you, God. Amen."


I LOVE this!

This is just SO beautiful! I absolutely love it! The imagery is great, the emotions are wonderful, you can really feel every word! I loved the lines "Black hair straight as silk Quivers from His stare". That conveys so many emotions all at once! The other whole stanza I loved was the one about guidance and asking God to help you not to fight it! Those words are so true and most people way older don't even pray like that! Take a bow girl, cause this shows both great maturity, innocence, emotion, and imagery in ways that I don't see all of the time with poetry. A truly delightful combination that I will definitely be re-reading a lot! Love, love love!

Wings of Eternity

Wings of Eternity | Sat, 04/09/2011

"Be an example to all believers in what you say, in the way you live, in your love, your faith, and your purity." 1 Timothy 4:12


Aw, thank you SO much! I smiled hugely when I read your comment. Those type of things just make my day! I thought of it at the grocery store and it hit me all of a sudden. Everyone's prayers are different, and I am hopeful I was able to interperet this in the correct way. Once again, thank you so much! I can express how happy such comments make me! :))~


Madeline | Sun, 04/10/2011

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Awesome as always!

LOL! That's fun! "Awesome as Always" AAA! Fun! Okay, anyways! LOL!

I know Eternity! Is'nt she great! I love all her writing! I'm so glade to have writen with her! and to be her friend!


See yah soul sister sitter!


Kassady | Sun, 04/10/2011

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
Write On!


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