A Song of the Dawn
Delicately, heaven’s gems are glittering up high,
Aglow as flames, till one by one they sputter out and die.
With all their smiles, the dark as well hath come to melt away;
Now see this countenance of joy – the coming of the day!
Come, see the East, ’tis ever bright’ning
Over earth’s far distant edge;
Most like to fire, the sky is fright’ning,
Even now, its rays are spread
To greet the coming bright one’s light’ning,
Hov’ring just above its bed.
Here, the brilliant bead hath come! It kisseth earth and sky,
Establishing its time of rule, its full revealing nigh;
Round and golden, strong and warm, it seemeth now to say:
E’er see this countenance of joy – the coming of the day!
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This is extremely well writen, James!
Keep it up!
Amazing. I can't imagine how
Amazing. I can't imagine how much thought must have gone into writing this.
Amazing!!
Oh that's beautiful! How long did it take you to write this? It must have taken a long time to figure out the acrostic and then rhyme it. Not only that, but the words and the idea is perfectly lovely.
"A wizard is never late, nor is he early; he arrives presicely when he means to." Gandalf
That is simply gorgeous! >
That is simply gorgeous!
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"You're pirates! Hang the code, and hang the rules! They're more like guidelines anyway"
-Elizabeth Swan//Pirates of the Caribbean//Curse of the Black Pearl
Heaven’s gems are
Heaven’s gems are glittering up high...
Lovely...
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He who is near to his Captain is sure to be a target for the archers.
-Amy Carmichael
Lovely as always James. I
Lovely as always James. I love your pieces - on one hand, I can appreciate the effort and workmanship. On the other hand, the flow, meter and rhyme are so well done that there's a certain effortlessness to it as well. Nicely done.
I love it! Keep it
I love it! Keep it up!
"Remember when 'you play like a girl' use to be an insult?"
-Mia Hamn, American Olympic soccer star.
"Being cool is not acting cool."
-Anonymous
Thank you
Thank you for the encouraging words, everyone! I'm glad to know that you can see a flow in it. I employed a strict use of rhyme and meter, allowing no exceptions (although I hedged a little with the word edge in the middle stanza, as it doesn't exactly rhyme with spread and bed). I was afraid that I might be sacrificing flow and imagery for the sake of my rhymes and rhythms. And perhaps to some extent I did, but if you can still picture the sunrise in your mind when you read the poem, then I am glad. Thank you all again for your kind words.
It reminds me of Job
It reminds me of Job 38:12-13: "Have you ever given orders to the morning, or shown the dawn its place, that it might take the earth by the edges and shake the wicked out of it?"
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He who is near to his Captain is sure to be a target for the archers.
-Amy Carmichael
Awesome and
Awesome and lovely.
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"Elves and Dragons! Cabbages and potatoes are better for me and you. Don't go getting mixed up in the business of your betters, or you'll land in trouble too big for you." — Hamfast Gamgee (the Gaffer)
James, You've done it
James,
You've done it again... Bravo.
Beautiful
Beautiful! Amazing!
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The Word is alive/and it cuts like a sword through the darkness
With a message of life to the hopeless/and afraid...
~"The Word is Alive' by Casting Crowns
May my words be a light that guides others to the True Light and Word.