Frozen

A Poem By Mairead // 6/2/2010

frozen in time
since I saw your eyes
I guess that's why
I still dream that you're mine

because I'm frozen in time
the time when everything was fine
something of sublime
life was my lullaby
 
I have a one track mind
why oh why
stuck in my mind
you and I

this dream is just a dream
can't turn wants into reality
it will take me long to see
some things will never be

I'll just try to live in my head
cuz there we're better best friends
but oh, it's all pretend
and it has to end

we're really dreaming now...

Comments

Mamie, this is

Mamie, this is wonderful....It's so haunting and quiet and sad.  I especially love how the ending just kind of fades away.

Clare Marie | Wed, 06/02/2010

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

I like this. The rhythm was

I like this. The rhythm was probably my favorite thing and the last line.

Anonymous | Wed, 06/02/2010

 I second that, Clare Marie.

 I second that, Clare Marie.  Lovely, Mairead.

Mary | Thu, 06/03/2010

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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!

:)

Thanks everyone!

Mairead | Thu, 06/03/2010

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"Sweet is the love that never knew a wound, but deeper that which died and rose again." - Mother Mary Francis

Lovely. It's almost rather

Lovely. It's almost rather song like.....

Erin | Thu, 06/03/2010

"Do your little bit of good where you are. It's those little bits of good put together that overwhelm the world." –Desmond Tutu

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So nice. I love the subject and the composition

Keri | Fri, 06/04/2010

I thought it was pretty good-

I thought it was pretty good- really liked how it ended. Good job. :)

paperpoet | Fri, 06/04/2010

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