Lonely

A Poem By Mara Kudos // 3/11/2008

Plastered on the once blue skies,

These drab clouds are rolling by,

I've never seen a sadder day,

Now I'm all alone.

Roses wilting, once so red,

A path of valor, soldiers bled,

Fades into distant memory,

Now I'm all alone.

Long forgotten and packed away,

Pictures of loved ones lost in the fray,

The tears that fall, let them be,

Now I'm all alone.


[[Note: This is my first poetry in awhile. I would like criticism so I can get better, but try not to be too harsh. :)]]

Comments

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I like it! :)
maybe the now, lonely could be changed to 'Now i'm all alone.' Keep writing more! :)

*happy face*

Velocity | Tue, 03/11/2008

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The Truth will set you free.

Thank you!

Thank you, Velocity! That helps. :)

EDIT: I edited that in, I like it better.
~*~
When life gives you lemons, make lemonade.

Mara Kudos | Tue, 03/11/2008

~*~
When life gives you lemons, make lemonade.

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Coolio,
And did u take that picture yourself? its realy neat!!
:)
*happy face*

Velocity | Tue, 03/11/2008

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The Truth will set you free.

No, I didn't. I wish I did.

No, I didn't. I wish I did. :P I got it from deviantart.com.

But this is getting off-topic. XD We should stop now. :P

~*~
When life gives you lemons, make lemonade.

Mara Kudos | Tue, 03/11/2008

~*~
When life gives you lemons, make lemonade.

=]

I like this poem, very good job =]

Tamerah | Thu, 05/01/2008

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