Truly Beautiful

A Poem By michelle leese // 7/24/2010

There she is

the most beautiful girl in the world

walking down the street

every boys eyes are in her derection

but is she truly beautiful?

her hair is like a blanket of silk

swaying in the breeze

but is she truly beautiful?

her eyes are like a million shining stars

but is she truly beautiful?

her nose is the perfect size

the perfect piont

but is she truly beautiful?

her lips are like an angels

not to big

not to small

but is she truly beautiful?

her chest

her stomach

her waist

are not a millimeter out of place

but is she truly beautiful?

her legs are just the right size

perfectly long and slim

but is she truly beautiful?

she has a flawless height

but is she truly beautiful?

she is perfect on the outside

but she is not  truly beautiful!

shes mean

selfish

evil

rude

hethen

revealing

and not truly beautiful!

 

 

 

Comments

I liked the first part of

I liked the first part of this poem a lot. The rhythm was good and the points.  "To" should be "too" if you mean "excessively, " and " piont" is probably a mispelling of "point."  But the ending was flat.  It would have had more power if you showed the girl acting meanly and then said "not beautiful"

Julie | Thu, 08/26/2010

Formerly Kestrel

So very true!

Good job! This represents everything about girls today. It's what's on the inside that counts, and I've seen quite a few people that aren't very kind.

I sort of like the ending, actually. It sort of ends softly, like you're realizing that she's not as perfect as she seems. :-)  

Madeline | Sun, 11/14/2010

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

thanks!

thanks! yeah I know some people like that and it made me think "wow that might make a good poem"  :-P

michelle leese | Sat, 12/04/2010

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