Gift for the Giver

Submitted by Damaris Ann on Mon, 05/15/2017 - 19:02

Like a tiny spring
From an everlasting River
Lord let me be
A gift for the Giver
So little You've asked
I've failed so much
My face unmasked
By Your lawful touch
I've stumbled so often
Complained with disgruntle
Yet You my heart softened
Won over my struggle
Please empty this spring
Sweet merciful River
Let joy now careen
As a gift for the Giver

Author's age when written

It's been ages since I've posted anything. The honest truth is that I'm having issues with extreme brain fog right now. This is the only thought I've been able to finish in months. I haven't even been able to read. Even light Fiction feels like reading a dictionary. Sigh. I'm hoping it'll clear up. Anyways, I just wanted to let y'all know why I've been quiet for so long. :) I hope my AP family is doing alright.


Damaris!! It's so good to see you on here. :) The rhythm in this is fabulous, and so deliciously spot on. On top of that, you have some really lovely phrasing at work here and you communicate your message so beautifully--this could be a song, maybe, or a refrain featured in a story or book. I just love the phrase too--"a gift for the Giver". You have that alliteration and then the repetition; it's all so wonderfully done! Truly, this may rank up there with one of your best.

I hope you're able to get over your fog, or at least to a place where you're feeling better! I remember going through a spell like that a couple years back myself, when I couldn't seem to read or write or do anything remotely creative. I'm actually coming out of one of those phases at the moment, after finishing up school--reconnecting with books and writing. I promise it'll get better! Hang in there, and in the meantime, know we're thinking of you!

Hello, Damaris! It's been so long!
Oh my goodness, I agree with Madeline wholeheartedly in saying that this poem has ranked itself up with your Top Five. Its cadence is lovely and its message is innocent and simple but also deep and profound. Your uses of repetition are genius and your rhymes are not the cliche, predictable sort.
And I totally get the brain fog, too! NOT fun at ALL.

Introverts unite!
From the comfort of your own homes!

Oh girls! You are all so sweet. Thanks so much!! My mind feels more "awake" now, so hopefully I'll be posting regularly again. :) love you all! <3

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

Ugh, I understand about the brain fog. I'm glad your mind feels like its waking up, and that it continues to do so as you experience your own personal little spring! Sometimes it takes time, but my own creativity/alertness sometimes comes and goes in waves. And as you also know, I went through a heavy period in my life this past fall and winter...and finally (finally finally) everything seems lighter and brighter. TOOK LONG ENOUGH haha. But I just get the feeling of "can barely do anything".

Hope your muse visits again, though, because this was beautiful...what a precious poem. And your rhythm is ON POINT. I read it while happening to listen dramatic music that someone was the perfect backdrop and beat hahaha. I could read this over and over:

"Like a tiny spring
From an everlasting River
Lord let me be
A gift for the Giver
So little You've asked
I've failed so much
My face unmasked"

Because it feels so good in my mouth!

Totally could be a song, too.

Aww girly. Heavy times are tough, but coming out of them we always see their worth, don't we?? Spiritual and emotional growth is worth all kinds of crazy pain.
Thank you for letting me in on a glimpse of your rainbow-hearted life. You are treasured, as are your comments. <3

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.