Submitted by Madeline on Tue, 06/14/2016 - 13:28

A thunderbird
strikes up
into the sky
wings blurring
an earthborn comet

a flurry of
flapped fleathers
and harried squawks
dilated pupils

below the dirt
is steadfast
but the air

all the silence
the placidity
is consumed
by a frenzy

and here lay
the known way
and there falls
the presumed all

and shrouded in the storm
of wings
and beaks
and chirps

is yesterday

Author's age when written


Your poetry always hits me viscerally before I can ever process it mentally (which I usually do on the second read, and which is my favorite type of poetry -- the kind that startles me physically first). I stood above the world and dove down with that bird....felt the wind shuddering in my wings. It felt like such a transition through life, too, a trust-fall. My favorite lines were "an earthborn comet". And I loved the mythical sound of "and here lay / the known way / and there falls / the presumed all." Gorgeous poem!!

Your wording is spectacular! I would definitely say I agree with Sarah Bethany, I felt like I was taken on a fanciful but also intense trip! All of it was great, the imagery, the wording, the flow! Loved it!!! Keep posting my friend, this is great!

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